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Saturday, February 24, 2007

Silent Lyrics

Your picture hangs in my memory
Your smile etched in my mind
Your voice is in my melody
Your eyes makes me go wild

Loving you is like being in a nursery
Full of naughty little children
Playing with toys and teddies and being merry
And games they play which they always win

I write this short verse
To dedicate our love
And let it be better or worse,
There'll be no end to my love.


7 comments:

Anonymous said...

Beautifully written!..[:)]

Anonymous said...

wow!!

Aditya Oday said...

thanks both of u
well was my first attempt - and a short one

well can you put ur name there?

Anonymous said...

Since its ur first attempt, its not bad for a start...but i still feel u could have worked more on the second stanza. It doesnt syncronize well with the first one. You began beautifully, creating an abstraction and second stanza doesnt do justice to the previous one.

Aditya Oday said...

Hi

Thanks for the honest comment.

I would surely try to improve upon on this.

Aditya

Anonymous said...

u got to improve it!

Lost last words said...

Hey...write more! You got to improve this one! :P

What better time thn now? :P